Approximately 9 minutes to read
Cliff Hut is a mysterious boy that's captured the curiosity of Claudette Penn, a girl in his grade. Claudette nearly feels attracted to him and his perplexity. What lengths will she go to to find out what this unfathomable boy is hiding?
Mystery, Thriller, Short Story
This story made me:
over 2 years ago iio said:
Really nice, loved it. Detail was very nice!
about 3 years ago Marissa LaPorte said:
It ended really abruptly. I think that you should write "HE moved away" "I still think about him sometimes" or something to that effect. It would bee a smoother letdown from the rest of your story.
At times the characters acted in a way that was TOO typical and cliche. For example: I need to tell you something but not here. Come with me!"
I really did like the plot though it was an interesting read for sure.
about 3 years ago Mars said:
I have to agree with Tibby; I'd have liked some more description. However, this was an interesting read. I think it would be worth continuing! It's too bad it ended so soon.
about 3 years ago Brooke Larson said:
Ooh, this is interesting. You could certainly drag this out, even with what you have! I was confused in the beginning because I was like, woah he seems like the stalker not her lol but I was definitely corrected xD you could add so much to just this. More emotion, more things that happen through the day, more thoughts. It's excellent so far! :3
about 3 years ago Pseudonym said:
This was pretty well-done. I would have liked it to have more description, though. I'm getting a sense of deja vu... it seems very similar to the movie 'Twilight', but I can't say for sure that's what you based it on.
Their overall emotions seemed slightly quick/dramatic, like everything was happening too fast. The ending seemed very rushed as well, and it kind of left me with a sense of "huh?"
But I still think it's a great story, and full of potential. With a few more details sprinkled in, it would make it even better. Keep it up!
about 3 years ago Tibby Kay said:
That was really interesting, though I would have liked a bit more description to it. Perhaps adding a bit on the beginning, not just jumping straight into the thick of it.
There were a few minor grammar problems, but those are easily overlooked. This really made me curious what's really going on. If you ever lengthen this, let me know!(: