From the Beyond

10 chapters / 26745 words

Approximately about 2 hours to read

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(IN PROGRESS) I didn't want anything... I DON'T ask for anything... So why me? There hasn't been even once that I have indulged myself to go out of the way and go all out, even though I'd want to do nothing with it at all.

It was just to satisfy them, comfort her, give in to their requests just this once. Now I'm left, running for my life. The darkness is enclosing and coming for me; I can't escape. Terror? Regret? Death? Something beyond this world?

And now that I've gotten my one chance to free myself from this cage, the pleading and the tear stricken face watches me... begging. Give up my freedom? Return to the darkness? Or live on with this burden of guilt and blood staining my hands forever...

Genres: Suspense, Thriller, Action

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about 5 years ago Kira Martin said:

I like this so far, but you have so many descriptions it was hard for me to get into this. 2 should be two and you should break your big paragraphs into smaller ones. I like the idea and voice. Keep writing!

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about 5 years ago Nicky Lang said:

Wow! I could visualize everything! You did a terrific job on this! Keep it up!

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about 5 years ago J.A.D. Lumanta said:

Your writing style is a amazing! I would just suggest that you cut your paragraphs because they look like heavy, intimidating chunks right now, but dividing them can help readers digest more and unclog the flow of the story! But besides that, it was great! Nicely done! :)))))))))

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about 5 years ago Stephenie Cole said:

Wow. I love, love, love, love, love (get the point) it!! :D Only criticism is that you should break up that HUGE paragraph in the first chapter. It's huge! But that's only my opinion. Ignore me :P Good job!

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about 5 years ago Nikki Cee said:

From The Beyond was really descriptive to the point where I felt like I was actually there, I love that you paid attention to the details of your character surrounding. :)

My only suggestion in making this better is to proofread. I found minor errors, nothing too distracting. I also suggest you cut down your sentences and to be careful where you place your commas.

Other than that good job! ^-^

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about 5 years ago Soja Moore said:

I only read the first chapter but from what I read was really great. The only thing I would have to say is that you have some really long paragraphs and you should try to break those up. Also be careful of run-on sentences. Great so far! Keep Writing! -Soja ;)

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