Umbra
6 chapters / 29169 words
Approximately about 2 hours to read
Description:
Umbra: Latin for shadow, shade, dark, dust, ghost.
During a solar eclipse the world becomes the area of Umbra… the area in total darkness, but isn’t the eclipse what everyone wants to see, the rare beauty and intriguing flaw? The sun, necessary to the world’s life, completely hidden and everyone wants a bit of it, even though certain death would be imminent.
The earth is caught between the contrasting moon and sun… Will it go for the sun- survival, life, warmth- or the solar eclipse- chilled, different, and ghostly?
But of course, it’s not as simple as that, there are forces working against the world and things are not as simple as saying so.
Umbra…
What will she choose: is there a choice when it’s destined?
Gracelynn Daniels is a girl set on self destruction, after she witnesses her father’s corpse dangling from the ceiling of their London home: it could only be suicide. And she has the silvery marks slashed across her body to tell the story. Somehow it only takes a moment of abuse from someone she loved, a tale of merciless heartbreak from someone she loved and a desperate mother and widow to suck her back to a world of sanity and sobriety. But regaining a life isn’t so simple, change is pending.
All of us have a history, but not all are aware. Maybe we are something we didn’t even know subsisted. All we need is that lustrous and lucrative key to enter it. But will we take that daunting leap? Do we have the choice?
Genres: Fantasy, Romance, Thriller
Tags: adventure angel depression dystopic friendship love mythology siren suicide tragedy
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10 months ago Amy said:
I think there's a bit of rushing in the beginning. Just slow down, cut out a few words (there seems to be a TON of descriptive words which is great, but I think you need to cut back on just a few of them.) I know that seems strange, but if you read (just the first chapter-if not all of it) it aloud then I think you'll see what I'm saying. Good job- love the title! The cover is a bit... well it's not my style but it works :) Keep it up! Sorry this took so long I was on vacation.
10 months ago Harbinger of Puppies ~ Off said:
A lot of this is opinion, and not compliments (because I have a tendency to think those), and may sound harsh, but I just want to help you out =)
-Don't use huge paragraphs. It makes it really hard to scroll!
-grown to hate herself since here father _____________ (what'd he do?)
-off of herself, she
-"Here we go," she whispered,
-Oooh... creepy thoughts.
-Hushed words coming up as if
-Who knows? You don't.
"Ha!" A sarcastic
-lynn, "Sounds farmiliar.
-Outside, the sun
Despite all that (crap) I really liked it! I didn't read the whole chapter yet, but great job from what I've read. It doesn't disappoint. I would try and clean up those bits, though. They detract from the story. Overall, it's dialogue punctuation.
10 months ago Harbinger of Puppies ~ Off said:
Okay, this is the first time I'm saying this to someone: the cover makes me want to read it. And I'm going to after these swaps. It looks totally awesome. So... I'll read it soon. x.x
/awkward