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Write Yourself In

20_01_2012mk06

Today won't be like tomorrow

1 chapter / 75 words

Approximately half a minute to read

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By The Dark Side Of Me

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Genres: Writing, Poetry

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8 months ago BubblexDrops said:

I'm not much of a poetic person and I don't know how to judge a poem, basing on my personal problem about poetry. I suck at it. xD I like this though.

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10 months ago Camille Flores said:

This is nice, but the ending was a little bit off.

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10 months ago L. Mercy Moore said:

this was excellent! :)

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10 months ago Hannah Wright said:

I would recommend a comma instead of a dash in the second stanza, and I'm a little confused by "my friends are lot"--is that a typo? Otherwise, a lovely and interesting poem.

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10 months ago Kira Budge said:

OK, pretty decent. It's got a nice tone and a good concept. You'll want to watch your rhythm though. Read it aloud and look for the beats. It's really gotta flow, you know? And like some have said, you missed some words on that "friends" line, which is awkward anyway. Think of a different way to phrase it. Nice work!