Approximately 3 minutes to read
©2012 Summer Reading Contest Finalist! Aria has to spend the summer at her grandma's, but a horrible memory on a summer night ruins it all...
Writing, Paranormal, Suspense
This story made me:
9 months ago Lw said:
This feels so great to read and I love what you done with the opening
10 months ago Kyla Marie Rich said:
Wow. That was creepy and well written. Nice work!
~Kyla Marie RIch : )
10 months ago Colin Lierman said:
...wow. That's all I have to say. It was quite an eerie piece (which is the kind I like!) and nicely written. Altogether, I enjoyed this piece! :)
10 months ago Mary Nichols said:
Congrats on being a finalist and good luck!
9 months ago Emi said:
This reminds me a bit of what happened with a character called 'Red' in the tv show 'Once Upon A Time'. It was well written and I loved the ending, but the dialogue between the girl and her grandmother at the beginning was a little rushed. Also, I felt like you could have foreshadowed what was about to happen by going into more detail about the Incident. Overall a nice eerie story; I can imagine it being told around a campfire. Keep writing!
While I do believe this to be a good story, and a well-established plotline, it seemed to me to be a bit short. Maybe a bit more with her and her grandmother, or a bit more allusion to Aria's previous "incident." Other than that, very nicely done!