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about 7 years ago Blazin'Andy said:
I really liked it :]
about 7 years ago Meredith Hilton said:
I like the sentiment! ONe thing I would decide is wether you want the last two lines of each stanza to rhyme. they do in a couple of the stanzas, but not in all, so decide one way or the other. Also, I wouldn't repeat 'up' in the fourth and fifth stanzas. It reads really awkwardly.
about 7 years ago M.H. said:
So sad :(
about 7 years ago ✩ Alexandra B said:
i really like the way it's laid out. very cool.
almost 7 years ago XxxSuzyQtyxxX said:
That is amazing! you totally captured the element of sadness! I heart it
about 7 years ago Etho Mack said:
what a wonderful poem, but it's a little bit odd when I read this line:
"Hiding the sound of my tears"
I don't know that tears have sound or you're referring to cry? well I love it anyway. :)