Approximately half a minute to read
kind of a jealousy/wishful thinking poem about a girl with a crush on a guy who's with another girl
**INSPIRED BY CHRIS BROWN SONG "she aint you"
crush on a guy
This story made me:
about 6 years ago Tiffani Torres said:
This is great! I kind of like the irony in here (or at least I think..) of that the narrator only knows cus she loves him from afar and stalks his facebook.
about 6 years ago Alyson Duquette said:
I can definitely relate to this. I love it. :)
about 6 years ago Elizabeth Payne said:
Story of my life. In poem form. Nice job- this is well-written, relatable and emotional, I love it!
about 6 years ago Illy said:
I found the poem sad and it kind of reminds me of taylor swift's song you belong with me. lol but anyways great poem.
about 6 years ago not in use said:
Fantastic! It's message is clear, and is laced with emotion. I sympathise with the narrator, and I like how you connect it with the modern world. It flows pretty well, and I enjoyed reading it! Good job :)
over 6 years ago Alison L. said:
I thought the beginning was really good, but it sort of lost its impact for me towards the end as I thought maybe the language was a little too...crude. The beginning has a wistful, sort of lilting air and the second one is just..full head on. Especially the bit about fakers and the facebook. Maybe you could work around those ideas and just make it a little more ambiguous? You can DEFINITELY still use those words because I know what you're trying to get at, but..i don't know. Just..polish it up a little?
Okay. That was the constructive criticism part, the GOOD part is that I enjoyed reading it! :) Well done!