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This story made me:
almost 2 years ago Christopher Paghasian said:
Seriously, I don't know how you come up with all of these original metaphors! Seriously! They are amazing! They convey what you're trying to get across perfectly! As I said on the last poem I commented on, this is a really great poem. Really!
almost 2 years ago Moriah H. said:
Your metaphors are amazing. Everything is halfway finished or half of a pair. This is great!
almost 2 years ago Charlotte Hennessey said:
aaaah!! The metaphors! The ending! AMAZING!
incomplete gurl? something tyler thought of? lol
almost 2 years ago Ellie Shayna said:
This was great, and as everybody else said, the metaphors were fantastic! My one gripe is that it doesn't appear to have a complete closure. Maybe that was what you were going for, but it left me hanging-not in a good way. I would suggestion adding one more stanza, just to wrap it up.
Great work, I really enjoyed reading this!
5 months ago V. Delrue said:
I really like your poem. The structure is good, the words flow nicely... I love how all the metaphors are related to something artistic. The meaning may be a bit confusing... But now everyone can give it their own meaning. I think that it's about being lost and not knowing what you want to do and not being able to finish things because of that. It's about feeling incomplete. But of course, this is probably different for everyone! I've searched for mistakes and such, but all I can say is that the last sentence may be stronger, but I've been thinking about a better one and I've found none! Keep writing, your poem was nice to read.
PS. I'm sorry if my grammar isn't good, I'm only taking English classes for three years.
over 1 year ago Emma Oliver said:
Hey! I really like your poem, sorry it's so sad. :( I like how everything is taking about things that have ended or thigs that are unfinished. Nice job :)